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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A zoo has no useful purpose. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

#zoo #purpose
I think that the question about whether a
zoo
 has no useful purpose is the one
that is
 open for debate. It is a topical question nowadays. Some people believe that a
zoo
 has an essential and cognitive purpose.
However
, other people believe that a
zoo
 has no useful purpose and people should observe wild animals in their nature. Personally, I think that both options have their advantages. In the following paragraphs I will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 these points and present my own view in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of people who think that animals should not be kept in a
zoo
. From the one side, a
zoo
 has many benefits for people.
First
 of all, children can learn about
animals not
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animals, not
 only from books and TV programs but from actually watching them alive. They can see animals, touch them and even feed them. I think it is an amazing experience for a child. He gains more knowledge and experience from
this
 "communication" with an animal.
Second
 of all, a
zoo
 is a perfect place for adults to see many animals that people are not able to see in their lives.
However
, from the other side, I keep asking myself "What kind of benefits wild animals have from a
zoo
?". Unfortunately, I can not find any of them. I think that wild animals should live in their
natur
Suggestion
natural
e environment.
Moreover
, I think that we should observe them through TV programs sitting in our
favorit
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
e chairs, or people who like danger should try to observe them in the native environment. I think that animals are not toys. I know that most zoos try to keep their animals in the environment which is close to their native, but they can not give them as much freedom as animals want to. To sum up, I think that wild animals should not be kept in a
zoo
. Personally, I enjoy more watching "Discovery Channel"
then
 watching a black bear who does not know where to hide from the scorching sun in a Texas
zoo
.
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