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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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A high number of
traffic
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 is a major issue in most of the big cities and towns all of the planet earth. The main reasons
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 happens is a big figure of vehicles on the roads and the viable solution is to increase the public transportation facilities. The increased amount of private automobiles is one the main causes of huge
traffic
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. It is very easy to buy a new car because of the bank's loan scheme and instalment payment and people are buying too many of them. As the number of vehicles is increasing,
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, the roads are not. As per the study, every contemporary metropolis need twenty five percentages of its land area for roads which is not a common practice in most countries.
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, people are spending too much time on commuting.
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, capital city Manila in the Philippines, where it takes more than four hours to travel around twelve kilometres. To tackle
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 problem the government should implement a better public transportation system as well as rules on buying new cars and more taxes while driving in a major metropolitan area. Most of the cities do not a modern transportation infrastructure and people totally rely on personal vehicles. As per the latest survey in the Philippines, people think if the metro railway was good, they would not take out their cars in the capital.
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 to the modernization of the public transport, the government should impose rules on buying more than one car per house as well as include high taxes while driving in the city centre.
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, we could talk about Singapore and the U.K. In Singapore, people need an approval for the authority before buy a vehicle and in the U.K people pay extra tax when they drive in London. Both countries have a minimum level of
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 mess. In conclusion, big and contemporary cities of the world are having
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 issues because of the high registration of new automobiles and less number of roads to support
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 demand, but it can be solved by the implementation of the public transport system and taxes on buying a new car and driving in the city.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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