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Universities should be concerned with educating people so that they have wide general knowledge and be able to , consider important matters from an informed viewpoint, and not simply prepare students for jobs required by society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#universities #people #matters #students #jobs #society
I would like to extend my support to the statement that Universities should be educating people in
such
 a
way
 that the
students
 can be aware of the
world
 around them.
instead
 of simply preparing them for jobs required by society. The reason being I myself have been subjected to
such
 a
way
 of teaching during my
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. I was learning a of subjects that were relevant to my course structure but completely irrelevant to the outside market. And I was able to realise that only after joining a profession. The four years that we toil in the university
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literally
 boils down to the graduate certificate that serves only as a document to fulfil the application criteria.
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 the
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responsibility
 of the University to train their
students
 in
such
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way
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 not only understand the concepts but
also
 find a practical use to all that they learnt in the classes. The universities should invite marker professionals to conduct guest lectures to the
students
 on the projects and job markets in the respective
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. Lack of general knowledge would put the
students
 in an
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awkward
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employers who expect the
students
 to be up to date with
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all the information from around the
world
.
Moreover
, learning about
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 developments and happenings across the
world
 would make the
students
 more confident and
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 them with global exposure. There was a youtube post in relation to the recent CAA and NRC protests across the country where the
youtuber
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YouTuber
 asked a couple of college
students
 protesting from a National University
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 repeated slogans in
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 against the ruling party for passing the CAA bill, they replied that they joined their fellow
students
 in the rally just as an excuse to bunk classes and the worst part was they
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 even know what really is meant
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 the CAA and NRC.
This
 incident not only brings
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sympathy
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 those
students
 but
also
 a fear.I said fear because of the consequences of
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 of
such
students
 in
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 biggest democracy like India.
Hence
, I would like
to conclude
 that
in addition
 to the
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 of the
students
, the universities along the Educational Ministry should alter the syllabus for the
students
 in
such
 a
way
 that they could develop an awareness before stepping into the real
world
 from college.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • well-rounded education
  • critical thinking
  • informed decision-making
  • wide general knowledge
  • job-specific skills
  • adaptability
  • constantly changing job market
  • engage with societal issues
  • global challenges
  • responsible and informed citizens
  • holistic educational approach
  • narrow focus
  • personal and professional life
  • drawbacks
  • prioritizing
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