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Some schools have its own characteristic. Describe how your primary school looks like?

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Every person has their own memory regarding the time they spent in primary
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. During the time they have spent in
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, some memorable moments happened.
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, each of them has its own version of describing their elementary schools. In my perspective, I will convey what my basic education
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 looks like, and how it can be differentiated from others. I finished my mandatory education in 2009 at a
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 in a small town between two big cities, Solo and Semarang, it was called Salatiga. In terms of appearance, as a pupil of a national
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, I wore a mandatory type of uniform in a grey and white colour, there was nothing special about it. Since the government mandated all national schools to wear the same costume. The building consists of several rooms which were built in the late 30s in a masonry structure. The
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’s officials maintained it well
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 the rule that preserving the old structure was mandatory at that time.
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, it bestowed a strong memory to all students because of the well-preserved medieval type of building. In terms of the subject, there were three types of compulsory groups of
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 that pupils needed to choose
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 as natural science, social science, and language. I was part of natural science class and math was my favorite subject at that period.
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, since I used to love math, my best teacher was Mr Rahman, he was a cool-blooded math teacher. Even though he seemed rude and cruel, because of his discipline and strictness, I could graduate proudly.
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Consider adding more details about your primary school's daily activities or any special events that made it unique. This would provide a more vivid picture for the reader.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next with appropriate linking phrases or words. This will help improve the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a well-defined structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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The personal experiences and memories shared make the essay engaging and personal.

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