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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days, getting
admission
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 to good universities is a big challenge. Competition among youngsters has increased. Both the poor and the rich people are finding
difficulty
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difficult
 to get admitted to a desired college. Personally, I believe that children from renowned families can get entry
in
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into
 colleges easily and quickly.
However
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, it is quite difficult for the poor students. Being born in rich family is a boon. Rich kids have access to almost everything whatever they desire. Even in some of the private colleges there are some of the seats reserved for the learners who are willing to pay a huge amount of
fee
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the fee
. It doesn’t matter, if
there
of them or themselves
their
 score is good grades or not in their academics.
In other words
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, if the child
didn’t even scored
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haven’t even scored
 good marks, they still have the option of getting
admission
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 in a well known institution.
Moreover
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, parents of students coming from rich background have good contacts.
For instance
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, wealthy people are attached to some of the social trusts and communities. With recommendation, without much effort they can get
admission
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 for their children in any of the institute of their choice.
On the other hand
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, people belong to the poor background have to strive hard to get the scholarships so that they can continue their studies. If they fail to get the scholarship, their dream of pursuing the education is shattered. Statistic shows that
the poor
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poorer
 students are more likely to drop out of the colleges as compared to the rich students because of their inability to pay high tuition fees. To conclude, it is easier for the child to get the
admission
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 provided that he has enough money.
Consequently
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, it is quite difficult for students coming from non-affluent families because they have neither money nor people willing to recommend them for a seat.

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