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Government spending on restoration of old buildings in cities should be stopped. Instead they should spend the money for housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

#government #restoration #buildings #cities #money #road #development
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Each
country
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's ministry develops their
country
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 with the help of tax money from the public and tries to achieve more popular than the competitive
country
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. In
such
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 development, the government started to invest in reconstruct of an ancient building. I agree that the authority should change its focus from remodelling their old building to develop the new buildings and the long road. On the one hand, the government thinks that re-building of their
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's old houses will gain a better name in the world market and it will attract more tourists to the place.
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 will generate more income for the government from foreign countries.
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, the state's culture and tradition will be reflected in their ancient building and it is useful for the future generation to know the past life of their hometown.
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, the
country
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 should develop its places with
more modernist
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more modern
 and better infrastructure to hold a position in
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 competition between countries. The
country
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's standard will be decided on the way the state design their building and road with luxurious and elegant.
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 scenario will make a decision that the
country
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 is developed or developing or undeveloped.
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,
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depending
 upon
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 factor, the
country
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's currency value will be fixed.
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, the automobile from other countries will come as a trader to invest in a particular
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 only when they have all the facilities for them.
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 will increase that particular nation's GDA (Gross domestic product) and can become
first
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 among the competitor. To conclude, the nation's authority should decide which investment will make the
country
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 to develop into the
next
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 step among other countries. By making investments in building new houses and road,
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 of reconstructing of old houses, have greater development in
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 competitive market.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • historic
  • heritage
  • preservation
  • conservation
  • restoration
  • urban development
  • housing
  • road infrastructure
  • tourism
  • revenue
  • community
  • identity
  • property values
  • craftsmanship
  • architectural styles
  • job creation
  • economic growth
  • compromise
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