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In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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Recently, the debate on developing
economy
 or the other factors has become heated. It’s true that many countries would try prioritise economic growth when they are developing, but the effectiveness for doing
this
 is actually debatable. It’s reluctant to say that there’s a lot we can gain from developing economies.
Firstly
, it can improve the city’s reputation. The economic growth would definitely boost the countries’s GDP,
this
 might help gain more frame for the city. As people are usually interested in travelling to countries with the high GDP, which represent their travelling quality can be assured.
Therefore
,
this
 might be favourable to the local business like the tourism and the hotels, which might
further
 be advantageous to citizens’ quality of life, which can enhance the countries’ soft power.
Secondly
, it can help enhance countries’ global state. As many countries are now union together, forming UN and UNCEIF, the decisive power for the countries depends on the economic situation implicitly.
For instance
, when the ambassador of the Iraq was giving a speech to advocate peace, the leaders of some developed countries left before he finished his lines.
Therefore
,
this
 shows that only when the
economy
 is strong enough, the countries might have the chance to be respected by the other counties.
However
, we might
also
 need to bear some consequence lead by the booming of the
economy
.
Firstly
, the environment issue might be a problem that we need to tackle with.
For example
, when China developed its
economy
 with a fast pace in the early 80’s,
nevertheless
, the citizens are now suffering from the drawback of the over-speeding development. Citizens in northern China are bearing the serious environment problems like smog and sand hurricanes.
Therefore
, the environmental factor is what we might ignore when we are dedicating in developing economies. All in all, as every coin has two sides, I think it’s reasonable for the government to prioritise the economic growth. Since it might be the only way for them to get a seat globally, and
this
 may
further
 help their development.
Moreover
, once the countries is with better economic state, they might able to develop some advanced technique to solve the problems lead by the booming of the
economy
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • quality of life
  • standard of living
  • infrastructure development
  • employment opportunities
  • environmental impact
  • wealth disparity
  • modernization
  • sustainable development
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • industrialization
  • ecological footprint
  • capital investment
  • urbanization
  • economic prosperity
  • fiscal policy
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