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A university education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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University
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education
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 should be free to all students
,
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 not all parts of the world
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agree
 with that statement as paid
education
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 contribute a major chunk to the government of the country for the growth, but I sincerely agree that that
university
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education
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 should be free
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 for each and every
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student
. With regards, to free
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 few developed
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countries
 provide free
university
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education
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,
 while
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the rest
 of the
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country
 has both free and low tuition fees colleges. I would like to state two countries and the
university
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education
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 which I agree and disagree with let’s start with
India which
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India, which
 produces the highest number of engineers and college graduates, where it provides free
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 to many students via scholarship and government college where the state or central government
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subsidies
subsidy
 the tuition fees to all students enrolled into the colleges.
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Whereas
 United States of America where the college tuition fees cost so high they are in debt for the rest of their life. A
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statistic
 showed the student loan debt is 1.4 trillion US dollars. Whereas many Scandinavian and European countries offer free
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 for their citizens and others. When students
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think
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 as a burden they would be worried much about the debt than the
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itself which
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itself, which
 is not really a good for countries which has high demand of STEM students. The best example
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of
 the free
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 is
Germany where
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Germany, where
 the free
university
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education
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 is available to every student other countries should follow the suit. In conclusion
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 I agree to
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the fullest
 extent that
university
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education
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 should be free to each and every student for the betterment of everyone.

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