Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The best option to get the people do some outdoor activity regularly is debatable. Some people claim watching Olympics on
televison
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
televisions
will
ecourage
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
the adults to exercise regularly,
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however others
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however, others
feel there are many different methods to motivate people to do physical activity.
This
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essay will discuss both the aspects and explain why it is superior to follow other effective ways to get the exercises done by adults. On one side, by watching
Olympics
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the Olympics
on
television
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people become lethargic as they are actually sitting in front of TV for really long hours.
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, it does more harm than good.
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, not everyone who watches the Olympics on
television
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gets motivated.
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, a person becomes active only by doing outdoor activities and not by viewing
television
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.
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,
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my cousin was a big fan of Ussain Bolt, she never practically ran on
ground
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the ground
. So, people may get inspired by Olympic
games but
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games, but
that does not substitute for doing physical activity. On the other side, there are many fitness centres where people can practically exercise in many ways. Some fitness centres have
gymnasium
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a gymnasium
, swimming pool, squash courts, and tennis courts. So, adults can do multiple activities depending on their interest.
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, I do swimming on
mondays
the second day of the week; the first working day
Mondays
and
wednesdays
the fourth day of the week; the third working day
Wednesdays
while on
thursdays
the fifth day of the week; the fourth working day
Thursdays
and
fridays
the sixth day of the week; the fifth working day
Fridays
I do play tennis.
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, there will be some friendly matches within the clubs.
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,
this
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motivates adults to participate in these tournaments and keep themselves physically fit. In conclusion, adults can get themselves enrolled in fitness centres and start exercising
instead
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of watching the Olympics on the
television
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.
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