Some people say that giving a small amount of money weekly to children will help them become more capable as they grow older. Do you agree or disagree.

The discussion about whether people should try to improve in all aspects of
life
or accept some parts of current situations will be discussed in
this
article. Is
this
accepted to stay satisfied with
current condition
Suggestion
the current condition
current conditions
or we should criticise the weaknesses of
situation
Suggestion
the situation
situations
and try to improve. While acceptance might be the key to the satisfaction and avoid some mental pressure, no improvement and success will achieve without trying to improve. To understand and digest the current situations and accept everything as it is, may bring the gift of slight
enjoyment but
Accept comma addition
enjoyment, but
it can develop mental depression in the same time. If
hypothetical person
Suggestion
a hypothetical person
the hypothetical person
lives in a reasonable home with decent income from average job, there will not be considerable reasons to argue and complain about
situation
Suggestion
the situation
. But living under the poverty line and adjusting to the condition with to effort to improvement is not a wise pathway at all! In other
hand to
Accept comma addition
hand, to
have
energetic personality
Suggestion
an energetic personality
and actively looking for improvements in all aspects of
life
can be challenging and rewarding
in
Suggestion
at
the same time. People in
this
category might progress forward all the
time but
Accept comma addition
time, but
if not, stress and anxiety can make the situations worsen the situation
everyday
Suggestion
every day
. So not only no success will achieve, but
also
significant
life
problems can bring the darkness everywhere! To explain my own point of view I should say, moderation is the golden key to balance ourselves between two extreme points! We all agree that we should be thankful and enjoy what we have. Respect and protect what we achieved so far while there is always room to improve. To be short and conclusive, taking the appropriate strategy must be adjusted in regards to out
life
style, capabilities and abilities to create
better future
Suggestion
a better future
better futures
for everyone without mental or physical harm to selves to others.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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