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some children can learn more efficienty by watching t.v. therefore, children should watch t.v regularly both in school and at home . do you agree or not ?

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Chilren
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Children
 must watch
television
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 in both school and home in daily basis because it helps to enhance children's learning capacity
.
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In my opinion, I think
,
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,
even though watching
television
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 helps to uplift the
knowledge
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 and helps to release stress
,
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,
reading books and engaging physical activities in daily basis boost child mental and physical well being which help to elevate students
lerning
the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
learning
 speed
.
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Firstly
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,
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,
 watching
television
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 helps to develop
knowledge
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 about
variety
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a variety
 of subjects all over the world
such
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 as science, history, technology as well as nature
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 Nowadays
,
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,
television
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 has
plethora
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a plethora
 of channels which providing educational and
entertainment
Suggestion
entertaining
 programme. .Encouraging children for limited time to
wach
look attentively
watch
such
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 programme
definetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 help to improve the children's
knowledge
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 and capacity while refreshing their mind
.
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For
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example watching
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example, watching
 discovery channel provides
chilren
a young person of either sex
children
 to know about
latest innovations
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the latest innovations
, natural disasters
,
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 animal behaviours to know about science.
However
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, watching
television
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 daily both home and school bring
detrimenatl
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
 effects as it limits the child's imagination and literacy levels while providing negative physical physical health. These days, most
television
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programme
Suggestion
programmes
 are made for commercial purpose and having colourful
,
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,
 fast moving motions keep
chilren
a young person of either sex
children
 watching
television
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 long period limiting child creativity and imagination
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 So it is important to motivate
chilren
a young person of either sex
children
 to read
variety
Suggestion
a variety
the variety
 of books as books enhance to develop
childs
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child's
children
colds
 language skills and reading skills while stimulating
brain
Suggestion
the brain
.
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.
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furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, engaging physical activities in school
such
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 playing tennis, cricket,
basketball as
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basketball, as
 well as swimming helps to refresh their mind that helps to focus their studies more efficiently. In conclusion
,
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,
 though
,
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,
 watching
television
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 daily provide to improve
childs
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child's
children
child
knowledge
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 about different subjects
,
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,
 reading books and engaging sports helps to boost mental and physical strength more efficiently to focus on their studies.
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