Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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The quality of education is very essential in our society, in order to create leaders with bright a future.

However

, the government and many organisations become more concerned about how to improve the educational sector. Many suggested that the best way to do

this

, is to seek the

opinion

of the students as well as accepting criticism against their tutors, others disagree with

this

suggestion. In

this

essay, I will discuss both views, and give my

opinion

First

of all, seeking the

opinion

of the students is indeed a better way to increase the quality of education,

this

will enable the governments and other bodies to identify any difficulties the students are facing and to be able to make any necessary adjustments.

For example

, I taught a group of students few years ago, and discovered only a few of the children were able to understand, but when I seek their

opinion

on how to make them understand better, I was able to assist these children in a better way.

Therefore

, these students encounter different challenges every day, but asking for their

opinion

will help tutors to understand how to impart knowledge in each student.

On the other hand

, the students may take for granted when asked to give reasons for their difficulties. They might use that freedom of speech to blame teachers whom they dislike, and to accuse tutors that have their interest at heart,

this

in turn could lead to hatred between the tutors and the learners.

For example

, in Nigeria some group of students gang beats a teacher who flogged them in the classroom for not reading their books. If

such

ones were asked to give an

opinion

on bow to increase the quality of education, they will obviously blame

such

teacher. To conclude, seeking the

opinion

of the learners has its advantages and disadvantages,

however

, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages considering students who are really willing to learn.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

321 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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