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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Others think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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The quality of education is very essential in our society, in order to create leaders with bright a future.
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, the government and many organisations become more concerned about how to improve the educational sector. Many suggested that the best way to do
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, is to seek the
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 of the students as well as accepting criticism against their tutors, others disagree with
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 suggestion. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views, and give my
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.
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 of all, seeking the
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 of the students is indeed a better way to increase the quality of education,
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 will enable the governments and other bodies to identify any difficulties the students are facing and to be able to make any necessary adjustments.
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, I taught a group of students few years ago, and discovered only a few of the children were able to understand, but when I seek their
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 on how to make them understand better, I was able to assist these children in a better way.
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, these students encounter different challenges every day, but asking for their
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 will help tutors to understand how to impart knowledge in each student.
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, the students may take for granted when asked to give reasons for their difficulties. They might use that freedom of speech to blame teachers whom they dislike, and to accuse tutors that have their interest at heart,
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 in turn could lead to hatred between the tutors and the learners.
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, in Nigeria some group of students gang beats a teacher who flogged them in the classroom for not reading their books. If
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 ones were asked to give an
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 on bow to increase the quality of education, they will obviously blame
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 teacher. To conclude, seeking the
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 of the learners has its advantages and disadvantages,
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, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages considering students who are really willing to learn.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • constructive criticism
  • classroom discipline
  • educational quality
  • teaching methods
  • learning outcomes
  • classroom management
  • teacher-student relationship
  • collaborative
  • real-world communication
  • professional growth
  • hierarchy
  • formal barrier
  • structured feedback mechanisms
  • anonymous surveys
  • moderated discussions
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