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Some people think everyone should be a vegetarian, because we do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some that all people should adopt vegetarian diets as
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 is virtually not important in our meals. I completely disagree with
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 point of view because it is neither justifiable nor scientific. In my view, it is absurd to ask everyone to become vegetarians. In fact,
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 a proposal is strongly against the core value of a free and fair society where each individual is entitled to choose the way they eat and live. In
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 modern world, people should not be forced to adopt any particular lifestyle, no matter how healthy that might be, unless they make the decision by themselves.
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 freedom to decide on what food they should have is actually one of the important factors influencing the level of happiness for many people. Apart from the human rights concern expressed above, the argument that people can live healthy without
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 does not hold water. It is scientifically proven that seafood, chicken and beef play a large part in ensuring people’s health. Different types of
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 are rich in different nutrition,
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 as protein, chemicals, and calcium, and they provide what the human body needs and help it function well. Without the nutritional elements that we take from
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, we would be more prone to many health problems, from malnutrition to
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a deficiency of red blood cells
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 why WHO suggests that an average adult eat / should eat 50 grams of
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 every day. In conclusion, I believe that it is unreasonable and unhealthy to ask everyone not to consume
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 since people should be free to choose their food and enjoy a balanced diet.
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