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Everybody should be allowed admission to university study programs regardless of their level of academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?give reasons for your answer and include any relavant example from your own knowledge.

#everybody #admission #university #study #programs #level #ability #relavant
I am
totally disagree w
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totally disagree
ith the statement that
university
 education should be right of anyone without any due sc
runity a
the act of examining something closely (as for mistakes)
scrutiny
nd
further
 analysis about their academic records in regard to lack of reserving seats.
First
 and fo
rmost r
ranking above all others
foremost
eason behind my assertion is degradation of tendency about va
lue o
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the value
f higher
study
 in the absence of co
mpitations.I
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
f learners would realise that ,
it
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,
can make possible easily without focusing on curriculum just by passing gr
ade
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grade, then
then
 they can be in
sencere i
lacking sincerity
insincere
insecure
n order to make it possible into the cope with co
mpititive c
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
onditions for acquiring pl
ace i
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a place
n
university
 .
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o add up it ,
it
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can not be ig
norned t
disregarded
ignored
hat
university
 expenses would be es
colated b
not close together in time
isolated
escalated
y fixing unlimited seats. Which may ef
fect a
have an effect upon
affect
c
ademic level d
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the academic level
academic levels
uring
st
udy d
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the study
ue to lack of tutors and facilities as equipments ,
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,
ich are required to perform in regard to
study
 purposes.
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,b
y
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,
such
 a disturbing environment all about
study
 ,
pa
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,
ssout s
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pass out
trength would be worthless due to inability to tackle several co
mpitations t
the procedure of calculating; determining something by mathematical or logical methods
computations
compilations
computation
o obtain jobs in various sectors .
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.
This
 is because ,
de
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creasing level of educations as like it than used to be .
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hich may effect on ov
erall unemployment level o
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the overall unemployment level
f na
tion e
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the nation
ventually.
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,w
e
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ll education op
pertunity s
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
hould be op
portunity t
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an opportunity
opportunities
o include them in the accurate pa
th but
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path, but
by doing
this
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o
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,
ther aspects would be de
molished which m
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demolished, which
ay create numerous problems in academic records and wo
uldbe d
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would be
ifficult to manage ultimately pr
efering t
make ready or suitable or equip in advance for a particular purpose or for some use, event, etc
preparing
referring
preferring
o ac
cedemic o
associated with academia or an academy
academic
academics
r any other co
mpitition t
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
competitions
o fixing
university
 educational seats in various streams is co
nsiderable way t
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a considerable way
o maintain its all necessities. To sum up,a
l
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lthough u
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
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any
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individuals, but
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put in effect
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emands of learners.

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