online shopping will be the closing reason of all shops in cities and towns, do you agree or disagree

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Online shopping is new market trend and lots of people do online shopping in
moderen era
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the modern era
modern era
. Some people argue that
growth
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the growth
of online shopping will be the closing reason of all shops in cities and towns while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
thinks in
different direction
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different directions
a different direction
. I
am not agree
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don't agree
do not agree
with
this
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opinion because of trust on
banking system
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the banking system
and doubt on quality issues.
Firstly
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, I would
like to discuss few
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like to discuss a few
points why people do online shopping. One of the most important
reason
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reasons
of humans doing online shopping is
time crunch
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a time crunch
. Generally they are very busy with their
job
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jobs
and they do not have enough time to go to traditional shop and
but
a relatively large open container that you fill with water and use to wash the body
bath
products so they prefer to do online shopping.
Secondly
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, Individuals found
online product
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an online product
more cheap
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cheaper
as compare to market. To illustrate, generally online companies
gives
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give
special discount
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special discounts
a special discount
on products at various
festival
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festivals
like Diwali, Holi and try to attract them for online shopping. According to
an
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a
survey in Hindustan times, on festival season there are more than 40 percent increase in online sales
On the other hand
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, people still have
trust issue
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trust issues
a trust issue
on online shopping. Though, online products are cheap but
biggest drawback
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the biggest drawback
is they
can not
can not
cannot
check the quality of product.
For example
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, if someone needs to buy a shirt
untill
up to, before the time
until
they do not check the
fiber
a slender and greatly elongated substance capable of being spun into yarn
fibre
finer
quality they may have many doubts in their mind. Another important point is
issue
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the issue
of duplicate products available in online shopping sites. To elaborate, many pupils get duplicate products from online shopping. I have my own personal example
for
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of
this
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, I ordered a power bank
last
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year of a famous brand from a top rank online site in India but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
get a duplicate product of
this
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.
Finally
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, people afraid from online fraud as well. To explain
this
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, Individuals
needs
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need
to
do
engage in
make
online payment for online shopping and there are many cases we heard about online fraud as
result
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a result
of
this
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they still fears from online shopping. To conclude, I agree with the point that online shopping
start
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starts
an revolution in the industry which saves lots of time and effort for busy
persons but
Accept comma addition
persons, but
I totally disagree with the point that online shopping will be the closing reasons for the all shops in cities and town.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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