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An increasing number of people are now using dating sites to meet their second halves . Do you think that this tendency help people to socialize or does more harm than good ? Give your opinion

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Amongst all animals, human beings are a social animal.
they
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They
 often live and survive in groups, and are always dependent on each other for many reasons.
the
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The
 most important bond shared by the human beings is the bond of family & especially the bond of
loved
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love
 ones or better-half.
with
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With
 the increasing use of modern technologies and globalization,
increasing number
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increasing numbers
an increasing number
 of people are now using dating sites to meet their life partners.
this
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This
 essay focuses on the fact that dating sites are very helpful to the people. Meeting one's loved one is a very important part of the life and it has now become very easy due to the online dating sites.
Although
 there
are
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is
 some precaution to be taken by an individual while using the dating sites, but if done very carefully dating sites are a boon. Online dating site
first
 of all brings the whole world very close to us,
thus
 there are no geographic boundary
barried
characterized by variety
varied
barrier
 to someone searching for their life-partner. Online dating sites
also helps
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also help
 us find a suitable choice for ourself, so once can really become emotionally close to the partner based on their common hobbies and nature.
Thus
 a person
intrested
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
 in comic book can fall in love with another comic-book fan
throught
from beginning to end
through
throughout
 the help of
such
 dating sites. Online dating sites
also
 helps us to text to the person
in
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at
 any point in time of the day,
thus
 if once cannot meet the dear one due to some circumstances, it is possible for them to talk
on
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about
 the site and be in touch. One may argue that there are
alot
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a lot
 of fake profiles on
such
sites but
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sites, but
 in reality the dating portals are working very proactively to filter out
such
 profiles and ban them for future use.
Also it
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Also, it
 is a crime to make
such
 profiles on dating sites or even social networking sites, because
such
 profile can be used to
decieve
be false to; be dishonest with
deceive
 someone and the dating sites cannot be responsible or it.
This
adding
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adds
 up the above facts, dating sites if used with caution can be an apt solution for people who want to meet their life-partner.
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