More students travelling abroad for further education. Do you believe the advantages of this experience are greater than the drawbacks associated with it?

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Nowadays

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many students tend to

enroll

enrol

foreign universities for complete their higher studies

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In my opinion

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I think,

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trend has more positive aspects than drawbacks

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Firstly

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entering international university help to students to mix with

massive cultural diverse

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the massive cultural diversity

massive cultural diversity

which enable to expand the knowledge about various ethnic groups and traditions.

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universities overseas students represent a large proportion which coming from different countries

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as India,

china

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China

saudi

of or relating to Saudi Arabia or its people

Saudi

Arabia that proving huge diversity. Being with them help to understand each

countries

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country

values, tradition, culture respecting each other

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internationally recognized academic qualification and language proficiency helps to find a well paid job easily all around the world

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instance,

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students

a student

who

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enters

Chinese university must learn

chinese

a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China

Chinese

language in order to complete his studies which open more high salary

chinese

a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China

Chinese

jobs in

future

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the future

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Even though studying international university bring more positive results

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students

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have

to stay away their family and loved ones long period of time bring

detrimenatl

(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury

detrimental

health issues. International students have to

stay another country

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stay in another country

away from their family and has to manage every needs without help

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student

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the student

a student

has to find expenses for accommodation, food as well as studies doing part time job while balancing their studies.

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will bring detrimental health issues

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as anxiety and depression. In conclusion, enrolling a foreign campus help to uplift knowledge about different

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marked by refinement in taste and manners

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languages while opening international careers, it

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has a drawback which

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Relevant & specific examples

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253 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.