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Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.

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In recent years we have seen a considerable rise in dangerous or extreme sports.
This
 essay shall discuss some of the main reasons why people engage in
such
 sports and suggest ways in which some risks involved in
such
 sports can be reduced. The main reason why people go for dangerous sports is that they get the thrill out of them. They like taking risks. They like to challenge their abilities and potentials. They feel a sense of satisfaction when they come face to face with fears while bungee jumping, rock climbing and so on.
In addition
, going through dangerous experiences gives them courage and confidence to face the hurdles of daily life. Another reason for pursuing
such
 sports is that there are a lot of fame and money involved in them. They get attention by doing stunts on motorcycles and jumping from tall buildings. They make headlines in newspapers and TV news channels. They feel great when their name comes in the Guinness Book of World Records. Once they get famous they get a lot of money
also
.
For instance
, many businesses hire them to endorse their products. They
also
 get jobs on the basis of their skills. Many steps can be taken to reduce the risks, that are involved.
Firstly
, these sports should be done under strict supervision. All safety precautions should be taken.
Such
 sports should be performed after sufficient training and under supervision of adults. Sport companies should require a license for providing
such
 training. Some people suggest banning some sports.
However
, I do not believe that banning is a good solution. To conclude, people do
such
 sports for fun, money and fame.
However
,
such
 sports should be performed after sufficient training from licensed companies and under some supervision.

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