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Too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings. We should knock them down and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As is known, the governments allot a large amount of money to take care of ancient buildings.
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Therefore, some
 suggest that they should be demolished and cutting-edge skyscrapers are built. I somewhat agree with the above-mentioned idea as the arguments for and against it are equal.
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 essay will discuss the both sides of the provided arguments. The major reason why I think that old buildings are knocked down is because reconstructing them requires a great deal of money. To be more specific,
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 of repairing, the authorities may replace them contemporary ones. Even they can obtain considerable benefit which helps to increase the number tourism places.
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, most European countries, especially France, Spain earn plenty of money from tourism industry which develops due to demolish ancient construction.
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, I am
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 convinced that repairing old-fashioned buildings might give profit to the countries.
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 is because those constructions can lure a wide range of tourists who interest antiques. One clear example
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 is that most cities of Greece are full of ancient buildings which are visited every year by travellers.
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, the timeworn constructions may give extra beauty to the cities. In spite of their antique view, they have particular features which
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can accept
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 most people. By way of conclusion, considering the above-mentioned reasons, I somehow agree that the old constructions are demolished,
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 it can lead to inevitable consequences. I firmly believe that ancient architectures should be
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preserved
 at the same time as some of them are replaced.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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