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Nowadays, more and more business meetings and business trainings are taking place online. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years the growing number of people are choosing to use the
internet
 for their meetings and education. In my opinion,
although
 the
internet
 makes meetings more convince, it brings some drawbacks. On the
one
 hand,
one
 obvious advantage of using the
internet
 is that online training sessions and business meetings have made our lives effortless. You have full leverage to attend these online meetings from home or from anywhere else, where you feel comfortable and peaceful. With the growth of population using online courses, the demand for transportation becomes less and many people no longer need to leave their homes.
As a result
, it leads to air pollution reduction.
Moreover
, they can save time and money. It means they do not waste their time in populated streets and traffic jams.
Also
, do not need to book a ticket and reserve a hotel for a
one
-day meeting.
On the other hand
,
one
 of the problems that using the
internet
 for business can cause is that in some developing countries like my country Iran, the
internet
 speed is very low and it could be disconnected anytime.
This
 was unfortunately illustrated by
last
 month's experience that all the country did not have access to the
internet
 for about
one
 week. That has a negative impact on many online businesses.
Furthermore
, it needs high technology equipment, and it uses a lot of electricity, which is costly and is not affordable for most people. Apart from
this
, another drawback of
this
 is we have less human interaction because of them, and you do not get a chance to make new friends. In conclusion,
although
 it has become more popular for people to hold meetings and tanning programs through the
internet
, it needs some necessary infrastructure
that is
 not available in some countries.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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