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Many countries aim to improve living standard by economic development, but some important social values are lost as a result. Do the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has been commonly debated that a number of
country
 purpose to develop
living standard
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living standards
 by economic improvement,
however several
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however, several
 essential social values are lost
as a result
. As far as I am concerned, economic development has certainly got more benefits than drawbacks. On the negative side, when countries improve living
standart
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standards
 by economic development, individuals spend
amount
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the amount
 of time
in
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at
 work
as a result
 of which, they have not enough time for themselves do social activities. A great number of
population
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the population
 of developing
country
 spend only 3 or 4
hors
a period of time assigned for work
hours
 with
thier
of them or themselves
their
 family.
For example
,
population
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the population
a population
populations
 of America
never attent
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never attends
never attend
never attempt
never attained
 any
intelectual
of or associated with or requiring the use of the mind
intellectual
compatition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
competitions
 or other events
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
 their works. To be honest, their profits more than other employer of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
, while they never take part in social values. Despite the evident drawbacks, economic developments
has
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have
 more benefits for citizens. The major advantages of the mentioned issue is that population of developing
country
have
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has
 high life standards. They have 2 or 3 own homes at the same time as their children go to special schools and they go to
schools
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school
 by car.
That is
 to
say their
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say, their
 education level more than other children so It is easy to
ge
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
get
be
go
tertiory
coming next after the second and just before the fourth in position
tertiary
education these countryes
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education in these countries
education these countries
education these counties
education these counters
. For
istance
an occurrence of something
instance
, in Japan
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 are more
inteligent
having the capacity for thought and reason especially to a high degree
intelligent
 than others so they enter the university easily.
Moreover
,
this
individuals
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individual
 has more profits
tahn
conjunction used in comparatives
than
then
 others.Their carrier life more than 10 years
as a result
this
countries
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country
 has great economic developments, namely they get high income from job so they have high life
standarts
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standards
. To sum up,
although
 economic development has
certain
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certainly
 evident downsides the benefit of it clearly
oughtweigh
be heavier than
outweigh
 them.

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