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A second language is regarded as essential to success in the modern world. It should be compulsory for all children to study a second language as soon as they start school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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One of the highly controversial issues today relates to whether or not the teaching of a foreign
language
 in primary schools and kindergarten should be obligatory. I strongly agree with
this
 view due to several reasons that I will discuss in greater detail in my essay. On one side of the debate, there are people who argue that the benefits of learning a
second
language
 at primary schools considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
that is
 that being bilingual is seen as crucial to triumph in the contemporary era. It is
also
 possible to say that, in comparison with adults, the offspring is more flexible in acquiring new skills,
such
 as those related to speaking another
language
. One good illustration of
this
 is the fact that, overall, a person who started studying English right from the beginning of his schooling has higher chances of showing fluency in that
language
 during adulthood than someone who began his/her English studies in secondary school.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact, learning another
language
 at a young age is actually a threat to the mother tongue, as it may be harder for bilingual children to identify themselves with a specific culture. A particularly good example here is a child who learns English and Japanese at the same time: during the
first
 years she may get confused with how to express her thoughts and emotions in both languages. Not only that, after growing up, she may lose the feeling of belonging to her native community. Having considered a range of arguments, I have drawn the conclusion that I am mostly inclined to the opinion that it should be mandatory for children to study a foreign
language
 at primary schools.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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