In the modern world¬, it is no longer necessary to use animals as food or other products, such as medicines and clothing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Processed products are now getting more and more rampant in today's society and

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as a source of

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and other items like medicines and clothes might not be required in today's setting. I do not agree with

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statement and in

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essay, I shall explain why. Having invented a different approach to how we address the shortage of food is a sight to behold. The cultivation of

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in the laboratory is ingenious and has its merits: fewer animal killings,

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, endangered

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could have a chance to populate. But there is always a different side of the coin.

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that are not endangered would increase

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, are hard to contain.

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, we do not know the long-term implications these genetically modified products

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on our bodies. Bill Gates,

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, funded research for lab-grown

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to counter famine in certain areas of the globe. And it has been said that

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is ready to roll out anytime

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year. Undeniably, it

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been studied by our scientists for years;

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, human testing

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not been conducted yet. What I fear is that the whole world might be considered as the test subjects and whatever the results might be, it would be used for future reference. Definitely, the disadvantage would reach as far as the medicines and items of clothing.

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are an integral source for the creation of drugs. Lard (animal fat),

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, is used by medical laboratory scientists when they isolate and test certain bacteria and fungi. Without the animal byproduct, it probably not have the same effect. Another example would be the silkworm where the source of silk comes from. There are counterparts for

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, not entirely the same.

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contribution of scientists to society is not entirely frowned upon, the outcome and effects, in the long run, are unknown so far. There might be serious side effects that the future generation will suffer

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

326 words

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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