In many countries the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

Crime
is
very old phenomenon
Suggestion
a very old phenomenon
and no one knows
axactly
indicating exactness or preciseness
exactly
when it started. The
crime
rate is spiking including murder, snatching, money laundering and etc. In
this
essay,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will examine the some reasons
contirbuting
tending to bring about; being partly responsible for
contributing
to
crime
and will
also
suggest some mitigating factor for the same.
First
of all, the main reason is the unemployment that will edge people to commit
offence
Suggestion
an offence
, a bunch of people
invlove
connect closely and often incriminatingly
involve
in
crime
, due to
imbalance
Suggestion
an imbalance
the imbalance
created by the society or Government,
for example
, Imbalance distribution of wealth among the society, which causes poor to transform certainly
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
more low life and wealthy becomes
more wealthier
Suggestion
wealthier
more wealthy
as a result
of that it create chaos in society which leads people to use unfair means to get the stuff they required.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
the
drug
addiction contributing more in enhancing the
crime
level around the globe,
for instance
, a recent study shows that most of
drug
abbuser
treat badly
abuse
will commit
crime
to
fulfiil
put in effect
fulfil
their
drug
needs
,
Accept space
,
finally
,
although
not a major
casue
give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
cause
case
but violence on
televeison
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
and movies is
also
a contributing factor.
However
, there are
soltuion
a homogeneous mixture of two or more substances; frequently (but not necessarily) a liquid solution
solution
seating
available to tackle the violence rate. In
fact a
Accept comma addition
fact, a
recent research
prove
Suggestion
proves
that providing better employment opportunities and education system results in
halted
Suggestion
halting
crime
rate,
furthermore
, there has been little
succes
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
against drugs, so
obeserving
quick to notice; showing quick and keen perception
observing
stringent action against
drugs
Suggestion
drug
traffickers can be another solution, to exemplify
,
Accept space
,
checking cross border supplies from
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
nations. After having
disscussed
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discussed
the most pertinent point of
this
issue, the major cause
are
Suggestion
is
unemployment and drugs, various
methods methods
Accept comma addition
methods, methods
is
Suggestion
are
available like creating employment, Keeping an eye on
drug
traffickers which can prevent from worsening.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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