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To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A visible change due to the advancement of technology to the human civilization is the
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. It has revolutionized our way of living. In
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 essay, I will discuss how
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 technology has a positive impact on our daily life and
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 I will outline few negative aspect as well. The
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 is a boom in
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 modern ultra-advance world. From the uncertain era, where our ancestors used to live in fear of darkness and predators, in
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 era where almost everything can be done by just a click of a button on a cell phone. The
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 has played a vital role to boost our way of living.
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, social media have connected us with all our friends around the globe.
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, the education sector has been significantly boosted with the
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. Students now have more options to study from a range of online courses and study material available online.
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, every comfort comes with a price. The revolution in
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 technology has significantly increased the number of cybercrimes. The online data theft has become more severe and there are instances where we have seen online frauds all over the world done by hackers. The government needs to implement some laws which will enhance the protection each time user go online to perform any transactions. The consumer data need to be protected and IT security needs to be more advanced. Several agencies should be made more efficient to safeguard the user information. To conclude, the benefits of the
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 and education outweighs all its drawbacks,
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 as cybercrime. Overall, the influence of the
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 to our life has more positive impact than negative.
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