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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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Providing safety
to
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of
 the nation is one of the most important
part
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parts
 for any
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.
Maintaing
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Maintain
Maintaining
 law and order situation is always challenging for those who runs the
country
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. In US
government
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, impose
curfew
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 on
younsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
 to travel without adults at night to make sure that their youth is safe. In
this
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 essay, we are going to discuss about the
curfew
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 being imposed in
US
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the US
. Sometimes governments
has
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have
 to take some measure to make sure that the citizens of their
country
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 remain safe.
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,
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government
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the government
provide
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provides
 free health insurance so that the nation as a whole keeps safe and healthy.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore, government
government
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 makes harsh rules to penalize the criminals for the crimes they commit to develop the fear of law in general public. As far as US
government
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 concern, they consider their nation’s safety at
wrold
an open way (generally public) for travel or transportation
road
 level due to which US has to invade in other countries to make sure that no potential threat will harm the citizens of US.
However
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, US have to take
such
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 measure in their own
country
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 as well.
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, recently US armed forces started the operation against drug dealers, which conduct their activities around the city after sunset. For the success of
this
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 operation against drug dealers US start imposing the
curfew
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 on teenager so, that SWAT forces can easily maintain active
survillance
close observation of a person or group (usually by the police)
surveillance
 in the cities with arm weapons without creating chaos between the kids and teenagers.
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, in my opinion imposing the
curfew
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 on teenagers is not beneficial at all, as
this
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 will
also
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 create disturbance among the kids.
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 of giving confidence to the nation's children it will give create fear. It is
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government duty
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a government duty
 to make their
country
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 safe to travel at anytime and anywhere for their citizens.
Therefore
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,
government
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 should not impose
such
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 curfews.

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