The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Other think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The difference in quality of life between groups of people in the

society

remains a highly controversial issue. While one thinks that a level of life has increased overall because of a technological revolution, other claims that

also

it's extremely beneficial for the richest groups.

Personally I

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Personally, I

think that a

techlonogical

based in scientific and industrial progress

technological

and scientific progress benefits educated people, no matter whether they are

currentry

at this time or period; now

currently

rich. Overall, persons who are educated enough to understand the progress will move go the groups of rich.

First

of all, breakthroughs in technology will decrease the

ammount

a quantity of money

amount

of non qualified work available

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the job market. Many types of work will be done with the help of machines making some people jobless. Due to

this

it would have become

more clear

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clearer

that

education

is a key strategy and it makes chances to become rich higher. To rely on any permanent job will be a hopeless idea.

For example

, everybody

hear

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hears

about Bill Gates or Steve Jobs, persons for whom progress in technology became crucial and made them one of the

reachest

possessing material wealth

richest

In addition

to that, the access to

education

will become easier than before. The difference in

education

has been the one of the most significant features of the richest. But because of unlimited information provided

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the Internet,

this

tendency will change.

Soon

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So on

the level of

education

will depend only on your motivation, desire and, in some

sence

a general conscious awareness

sense

senses

scenes

, of your abilities. The well-established class system will be no longer a stable system, the

society

will be

moew

used to form the comparative of some adjectives and adverbs

meow

homogeneous. In conclusion, innovations can have a great impact on

society

in general. The previous

society

patterns will be totally

reduntant

more than is needed, desired, or required

redundant

. Motivated and talented people will have chances to rule financial flows. No

doubts

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doubt

that everybody of us will benefit and admire

such

a situation.

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