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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangements and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:- 1. describe your situation 2. explain your problems and why it is difficult to work 3. say what kind of accommodation you would prefer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that I am unhappy with the
room
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 allotted to me. The
room
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 itself is fine, but
intolerable
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 activities of my roommate make me difficult to work. I am hopeful of receiving your support in
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 matter. The main problem I am facing is that my fellow mate plays loud music during the evening time, which is my study time and disrupts my concentration completely.
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, he invites his friends to our
room
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 for the weekend party. It becomes difficult to sleep during those days.
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 of which I feel
sleep deprived
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 all the time. I have requested him several times but in vain. My academic record is declining day by day, which is a serious issue of concern for me. Keeping my condition in mind, I hope you will help me. I request you to either give me a new
room
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 or get me a new fellow mate. In either case, I require a quieter
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 or an understanding roommate. I hope you will understand the urgency of my problem and help me. Yours Faithfully, Jack Jones
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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