Some people think that watching sport is a waste of leisure time. do you agree or disagree ?

It is believed that watching sports
does not add
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do not add
value to ones life.
watching
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Watching
sports by those who love them entertains them and
also
brings people.
This
essay will discuss will disagree with the statement watching sports is a waste of
leisure
time.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
those who love
games have
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games, have
fun and it entertains them
aswell
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as well
,
Accept space
,
because sports keep you
glue
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glued
to your
sit
assign a location to
site
seat
.
everybody
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Everybody
come
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comes
together as one to watch though everybody and the team he or she supports..
example government
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The example, government
The example government
Example government
of
country
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a country
the country
invest
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invests
in sports to enable his country to take part in it..In clear view
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think sports
doesnt
does not
doesn't
waste
ones
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one's
leisure
time.
Secondly
..
sports
Suggestion
Sports
brings togetherness and a
sence
a general conscious awareness
sense
of unity.
working
Suggestion
Working
throughout the week keeps one busy
throuhout
all the way through
throughout
the
week keeping
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week, keeping
you away from family and friends..
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
during
this
leisure
hours you come together with friends and family to watch that particular spots you all like.
watching
Suggestion
Watching
sports with colleagues and family is fun. In conclusion watching games during
leisure
hours worth it because it brings family together and
also
entertains those that love watching it.
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