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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment

#governments #money #railways #roads #statment
Nowadays, means of
transportation
 are most essential in daily life.
Train
 and
car
 are
common form
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a common form
common forms
 of
transportation
 that need
support
 from governments. In my point of view, I do agree that governments should
support
 money on railways rather than roads because of
train
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a train
 is more
safety
, friendly to
environmental
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the environment
environment
environments
 and
safe
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safer
time
 than
car
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a car
cars
. Comparing
safety issue
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the safety issue
 between
car
 and
train
, we always heard in news about
car
 accident more than
train
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a train
trains
. Since,
train
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the train
 is public
transportation
, the
safety
 is
high concern
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a high concern
. Most of people choose to
use
 public
transportation
 for
this
 reason. Governments should build and maintain railways and
train
 to be good conditions. Beside of
safety
 reason,
train
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the train
 is more friendly to
environmental
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the environment
environment
.
Air pollution source
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The air pollution source
come
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comes
 from
care
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the care
a care
 more that
train
. Not just only for passenger,
train
also
use
 for
delivery
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delivering
 cargo and commodities. Which can contain a number of goods more than
car
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a car
the car
. If
every one
all people
everyone
use
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uses
is using
 their own
car
 for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 and transport goods, it would be
huge source
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a huge source
 of air pollution. Government should concern and
support
 railway to prevent global pollution.
Lastly
, trains
are
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is
safe
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a safe time
time
 of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 more that
cars
an occurrence of something
case
. When
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to long distance, you can
use
 express
train
 which we can
traveling
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travel
travelling
in
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at
 500 km within
hour
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the hour
an hour
hours
.
This
 can
safe
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
 a lot of
time
. In conclusion, governments should
support
 their people to
use
 public
transportation
 for their
safety
, environmental and
time
.

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