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Some people think that to be successful, you need to get a university degree, whereas others say it is not true. Discuss both the ideas.

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Everyone thrives to get success in life. It is often argued that in order to be victorious, one should have academic
qualification
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while
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 there are certain individuals who feel
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sides of the given argument and will reach
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an appropriate conclusion. Success has always been thought of to be achieved by
professional
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 degree.
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, a qualification is a proof that an individual has gone through all the theoretical aspects. In order to achieve
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academic
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 certificate, one has to learn the basics of the subjects and the exam results
guarantees
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 that a pupil possesses enough
knowledge
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 in the
concerned
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field
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, a
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bachelor's
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 Degree in
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field
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 involves seminars, regular theoretical and practical tests
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with
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industrial projects which
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 on a student’s behalf.
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, a reputed educational institute’s credibility
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 makes sure that a pupil is ready for future endeavours. To get admission in
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 academies through rigorous scrutiny is itself a measure of success.
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, there is a certain school of thought
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 in practical
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 degrees to triumph.
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knowledge
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 of anything makes a better understanding of the
subject
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. A
well qualified
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 student might be theoretically sound but if he is unable to put the
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to
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 it is of no use. As a reference, my mechanic,
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 not qualified, is proficient in mending my car which is the principal requirement.
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, having
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 of actual tasks quickens the learning of the
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 with added information. Just reading takes
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 time to understand the
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,
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, practically doing thing not only makes one aware
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subject
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 but
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 help to learn about various issues which arise at the time of real implementation. In conclusion, I believe that having practical
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 is
driving
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 force for anyone towards being successful.
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, basic qualification
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 any
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 is important as it lays a firm foundation in one’s mind.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • admission policies
  • merit-based admissions
  • diverse student body
  • socio-economic background
  • inclusivity
  • academic standards
  • equal opportunities
  • quota system
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization of education
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