Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people argued that closure of local business will lead to
extinction
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the extinction
of local communities due to significant development and massive expansion of supermarket in
majority
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the majority
of countries. I strongly agree with the former.
This
essay would discuss my notion.
To begin
with, in many developed countries, establishing malls and supermarkets enables the citizenry to shop at ease without undergoing the tussles and hassles to purchase products in local markets. These
development
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developments
tends
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tend
instill
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to instill
lost of hope to the sellers
at
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in
rural areas as they are no longer patronized. A research conducted by business marketers in 2018 at a local community market in
Nawfia Anambra state
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the Nawfia Anambra state
a Nawfia Anambra state
depicts they experienced
shortage
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a shortage
of sales of goods and services.
In addition
, goods sold at supermarket are well scrutinised and thoroughly checked before human consumption. Inadvertently preventing usage of expired goods and products that would eventually lead to chronic health deterioration and death. Unlike the goods displayed at the local markets, they aren't investigated and monitored. These
act
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acts
tends
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tend
to cause more harm than good.
For example
, my colleague narrated the story of a butcher that sold out a contaminated meat at a cheaper rate to the community members which lead to food poisoning and inevitable death to the consumers of the society. After
futher
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
investigation, it was deduced that the massive death was due to the infected
meat thereby
Accept comma addition
meat, thereby
leading to closure of the local market. In conclusion, set ups of supermarkets in some strategic areas of the country would affect the services and sales of the local sellers because it's more accessible and durable.
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