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PEOPLE NOWADAYS ARE NOT FIT AND ACTIVE THAN THE PEOPLE FROM THE OLDEN DAYS. DISCUSS THE CAUSES FOR THIS SITUATION AND SUGGEST SOME POSSIBLE SITUATIONS.

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In recent times,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
are not fit
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didn't fit
is not fitting
don't fit
 compared to our forefathers in those days. The essay will discuss some of the causes of the Lack of Fitness nowadays and states possible solutions to these causes. One of the most
comon
belonging to or participated in by a community as a whole; public
common
commons
 causes of
unhealthiness
Suggestion
unhealthy
 these days is bad nutritional intake. We obviously
can not
can not
cannot
 compare the healthiness of food intake nowadays to that of those days. It has become so difficult to have a balance diet as we take more of junks and
preseved
prevented from decaying or spoiling and prepared for future use
preserved
 frozen food with little or no nutrients. An example of these is the rampant low packed cell volume pregnant women of our time reportedly suffer from
,
Accept space
,
are medically linked to bad diet,
this
 was never a cause for concern
to
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for
 the pregnant women in those days.
In Addition
, research as shown that work stress has
also
 contributed to the Lack of fitness in a way that work life balance as it has become impossible to achieve. Working under pressure and impossible target has not only caused lack of concentration but
also
 serious health condition. A good example of
this
 is myself,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 work round the clock so that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 can
hadly
only a very short time before
hardly
 remember
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