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Todays children are living under more pressure from the society than the children in the past. To what extent do you agree or diagree give your opinion.

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Modern day children are put to stress from the
society than
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society, than
 children in the olden days because there is advancement in technology and adopting of western cultures.
This
 essay will agree will the statement that modern day children are under
pressure
by
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from
 the environment Technology advancement nowadays and the introduction of phone and computers and many electrical
gadget
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gadgets
 have enlightened the children and there a global connectivity in
such
 that they are able to communicate to themselves by using
this mediums
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this medium
these mediums
.
This
put
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puts
pressure
 on the children because they intend to have what
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 person is having in the community
.
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.
Social amenities tend to force the
children thereby
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children, thereby
 mounting unnecessary force from the society on the kids. Adopting of western cultures
also
 in a way accounts for
unnecessary
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the unnecessary pressure
pressure
 from the society on the children. Because
thus
 cultures tend to have negative or positive effects on the children due to the
pressure
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 put on them by the community. Other attitude from counties happens to mount
pressure
 on the children. In conclusion
,
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,
modern day children get
pressure
 from the community by the
introduction
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Introduction
 of electrical gadgets and adopting western cultures put unnecessary
pressure
 on the children..
This
 essay
support
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supports
 the statement.
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