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A growing number of people feel that animal should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #rights #humans #animals #food #research
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For
 the
last
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 few decades, being increased the
important
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importance
 of animals across the globe, because they are
important part
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an important part
important parts
 of the world.
some
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Some
 people believe that animals should have strict rules in order to protect them, others think that
human
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humans
a human
 can utilise the animals to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their needs.
To begin
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, there are some convincing arguments in favour of protecting animals.
First
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 and foremost is that animal conservation is important to save eco-cycle. If animals are vanished by people with a view to fulfilling the humans need, it would impact on
Environment
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the Environment
, as animals play a significant role in
eco-cycle
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the eco - cycle
.
Moreover
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, there is
culturally importance
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the cultural importance
cultural importance
 of animals. Due to worshipping animals as a God in many countries, where animal cannot be used as food for human,
otherwise
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 people agitate against the Government, so
plethora
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the plethora
 of strict rules have been imposed by both state and union government.
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for
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For
 example, In India,
cow
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the cow
cows
 is culturally and traditionally important, so it is prohibited to harm cow.
On the other hand
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, there are some arguments in support of using animals for different purpose of
human
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humanity
.
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firstly
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Firstly
, finding a new
drugs
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drug
 for people.
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although
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Although
, it is
illegal activity
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an illegal activity
 to research on animals, new drugs would be useful for people with a view to having
long and healthy life
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a long and healthy life
, as new medicine is effective to decrease Myriads of disease as well as it would be available at
cheaper rate
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cheaper rates
a cheaper rate
 for human.
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In
 addition, it plays a crucial role to gain
handsome amount
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a handsome amount
 of money.
it
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It
 animals protected by strict rules, many countries might be a poorer, because they depend on
animals
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animal
 products like elephant teeth and meat which are exported to other countries in order to earn money.
For example
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, Africa
survive
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survives
 only on selling various
animals
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animal
 products in many countries. In my opinion, it is beneficial for
human using animal
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human using animals
the human using animal
 as food and medicine, though in many
country
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countries
, it hurts people feeding to consume animals to achieve human demand To conclude
,
Accept space
,
animals play a crucial role to save
environment
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the environment
 and humans live
,
Accept space
,
so animals have rights for
protection
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protecting
 their lives.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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