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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities have to make it easier, especially for such groups, to get into them. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the world has placed a premium on
knowledge
 and
education
 as a way to take in essential information and skills. Getting a higher
education
 can be difficult for poor people who lives in rural, which needs universities’ help for these groups to get into them easily. I completely agree with
this
 statement on the grounds that, they are
hardworking
Suggestion
hard working
 students and have a high
level
 of competence to receive tertiary
education
.
To begin
 with, lack of equipment in some rural places can trigger making obstacles in getting
further
education
, while some of them are really versatile and have high
level
 competence in learning and gaining a higher
education
. If universities consider an exception for rural students, it can prevent them to lagging behind and result in enhancing their aptitude.
For instance
, according to the BBC news, people who live in rural are cleverer than who is living in the city caused by having more organic food and inhaling fresh air. Having said that,
however
, in order to improve
knowledge
 and
education
level
 in rural areas, it is essential to consider a quota for rural areas to make it easier for students to get into higher
education
 and to acquire
knowledge
. As an example, it can foster rural students'
training skill
Accept comma addition
training, skill
 and force them to make a commitment to the government, which they tend to come back to the villages and proceed training in the rural areas for at least 5 years, after they were graduated. To conclude, I believe that making an especial quota for the rural areas can lead to enhancing
knowledge
 and improving the
education
level
 in rural society, and helps government to provide excel labours in the future.

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