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People spend a lot of money on various things as they earn more money nowadays than before. Is it a positive or negative development?

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There is an opinion that nowadays as people obtain more
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, they spend a great portion of it on variety targets.
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 there are a number of benefits in
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 development occurring
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 people, I believe the drawbacks involved more. On the plus side, there are some advantages for people.
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 with, gaining more
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 people can be afford more than before. Simply put, as people earn more income it leads to they become more affordable to buy or shop their latent needs. Take shopping which is a common controversy as an example; they can shop thing they don’t really
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need, but
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 of advertisements they think they need them as they become richer by gaining more
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.
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, people could obtain whatever things appear in their mind or thing they wanted when they were a child as they gain more income.
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,
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 may be contributing to feeling better about themselves.
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 the downside cannot be ignored. The most axiomatic argument is concerned with purchasing more latent needs as people become richer by obtaining more revenue. Considering that, generally speaking, it can be an inevitable fact that whenever people obtain more revenue they may be spending their
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 on thing that they don’t really need and
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 result in people don’t pay attention about the necessary and crucial topics. A good illustration of
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 is people’s child future may be ignored.
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, purchasing or spending
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 on things are not crucial demand as people obtain more income maybe become a significant contributor to consumerism which is
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 decade concern. To conclude, regardless of benefits, there are a number of drawbacks involved in
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 trend are by no means negligible. In my opinion, spending more
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 as people gain more revenue will bring about many issues that stated former.

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