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Some people the best way to build a happier society is to ensure there are only small differences between the rich and the poor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As is known, these days, a majority of countries suffer from less happier community.
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, some suggest that it is considerably crucial for countries to fill the gap between wealthy and impoverished people. I somewhat agree with the above-mentioned idea as the arguments for and against it are equal.
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 essay will discuss some reasons of
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 issue. The major reason why I think that the governments should not discriminate among their population is because people may not have self-confidence in
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 regard. To be more specific, the authorities might build free of charge schools which are used by both poor and rich students in order to children do not feel any discrepancy between them.
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 education may help people to find an efficient position in work life,
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 of which they can have a stable revenue.
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, the distinction between the poor and the rich can vanish. Another convincing argument is that as I have mentioned before the jurisdictions play a vital role in people's life.
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 to say, they might make people at the same level.
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, free hospitals can be built, and people may be provided with the free treatments which are required from them.
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, intellectual, but poor people might be equipped with a well-paid job which is the opportunity for them to work with the rich together. By way of conclusion, considering aforementioned arguments, I somehow agree that if all people have self-satisfaction,
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 society can be the happiest one. I hope that all governments ought to do a variety of reforms so as to remove discrimination between people.
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