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Some people believe that it is best to accept bad situation, such as unsatisftory jobs or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Life is always not the same, Its a mixture of positive and negative situations. There are different opinions based on
this
 some beliefs people should accept the bad situation where others say its better learn from it. In my opinion, people should face
such
 a crucial situation so they can survive. Some people believe that anything wrong happens in their life is their fate because they do not have any courage to accept it or taught to respond like
this
 in their childhood.
For example
, my grandparents, advise me on my difficulties, that it is your destiny, you cannot change it. Mostly older people rely on tradition, had
such
 kind of characteristics that they do not have any choice rather than accepting that or live with it.
However
, people, especially the younger generation do not follow
such
 thinking. They are educated
moreover
, have the ability to face
such
 complicated circumstances. From my personal experience, whenever I have been in trouble always dared to face it, without fear that improves my confidence
in addition
 to that it helps me to succeed. The Majority of the youngsters are ready to take it as a challenge. In conclusion, around the world, people have various views on troubling situations. Some of them can accept challenges, while others do not and they blame their fate. That mainly depends on the circumstances they have grown up as well as lack of education. In my point of view, handling difficulties without fear is the best move towards success.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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