Some people become famous at young age. Is it good thing or bad thing?

Nowadays, with new technologies and social media many young people have had fame in early
age
. While some people think that
this
trend may influence the youngsters both academically and socially, others think it is good to gain
famous
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fame
in early
age
. In my opinion, I believe that it is completely dangerous to become a celebrity before becoming a mature adult. Many adolescent have been inspired by celebrities, which they have seen in TV's shows. These young
peopleafter
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people after
the
emerace
include in scope; include as part of something broader; have as one's sphere or territory
embrace
of social media they get the opportunity to imitate their
favorites
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourites
favourite
. Once they achieve a
considrable
large or relatively large in number or amount or extent or degree
considerable
considerably
followers
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follower
or feedback, they
imprented
establish or impress firmly in the mind
imprinted
impregnated
implanted
in their small mind a good feeling.
For example
, regarding
latest study
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the latest study
conducted in the UK shows, 30% of social media celebrity were under the
age
of 18, whose felt
proad
feeling self-respect or pleasure in something by which you measure your self-worth; or being a reason for pride
proud
pride
parade
for being followed by a huge number of people including adults.
Therefore
, early becoming known in publicity give rise to a positive emotional feeling for
this
achievement. On the downside, those who experienced celebrity life in their young
age
are highly influenced by
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
advers
contrary to your interests or welfare
adverse
effect of their real life and education progress. To illustrate, entering
this
style of living result in having a massive
scheduals
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schedule
schedules
, which would destroy their childhood by
lossing
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
losing
marks in
school
or even
abondaning
forsake, leave behind
abandoning
it.
For instance
, John Benjamin had
abondaned
forsaken by owner or inhabitants
abandoned
his
school
in
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at
age
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the age
of 12 years old, since he gets
an
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a
job offer in TV sitcom in
hollywood
the film industry of the United States
Hollywood
. Even though he
become
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becomes
famous actor l, he did not get any
school
degree after that.
In addition
, become less socialise is a consequence of
this
new life style, have less childhood friends and
memorise
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memories
.
Thus
, these small
age
celebrites
a widely known person
celebrities
cannot handle
this
fame, thereby they it
going
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goes
is going
to
adversly
in an adverse manner
adversely
affect their education and the social
circul
ellipse in which the two axes are of equal length; a plane curve generated by one point moving at a constant distance from a fixed point
circle
circles
around them. In conclusion, social media have given adolescent the chance to become popular and known.
Although
it result in
happness
state of well-being characterized by emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy
happiness
, it
influence
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influences
their
school
and
people
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the people
around them as well. In my opinion, I think it is a demerit to gain fame in early
age
.
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