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Many people think that students who go to university directly from school benefit less and can contribute less to their courses than those who travel or do jobs before they start their university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Numerous masses opine that learners who directly join
university
 after school get less advantages as compare to the students who do jobs and take a
break
 from study. In my opinion, taking a
break
 is necessary after secondary education.
This
 essay will discuss some reasons to support my viewpoint in the subsequent paragraphs in an efficacious way. To commence with, a student who
take
Suggestion
takes
 a
break
 after 12-13 years of regular study can refresh his mind with doing some
job
 and travelling.
For instance
, many companies
does not accept
Suggestion
do not accept
 the fresher
employees even
Accept comma addition
employees, even
 after graduation or post graduation. They seek some experienced workers.
Therefore
, students who make a gap after secondary education and take some
job
 experience are more eligible for
jobs
Suggestion
the jobs
.
Moreover
, a gap year can cover the mistakes of a learner in upcoming education. To demonstrate, those students who have made a distance in their
further
 studies can understand the practical courses conveniently.
Furthermore
, youngster students who have done a
job
, can pay their
university
 fees by their own.
Otherwise
,
Accept space
,
 they have to take
study
Suggestion
student
 loan.
For example
, many learners in USA repay their student loan even
in
Suggestion
at
 the age of 60.
However
, jobs can save students from
this
 scenario. Apart from that, learners can choose their
university
 courses according to their interest in a specific field, after refreshing their mind with a holiday trip. They are more likely to understand the particular subject, because their minds are fresh to accept the tough practical courses. To conclude, a
break
 and
job
 is essential for students to receive
the better
Suggestion
the best
 results in their
university
 curriculum. It is beneficial for them to earn experience in some kind of
job
 and travelling. I
also
 had a part time
job
 before joining the
university
, and it helped me to wisely select my
further
 subjects.
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