Some people think that there are benefits in going to private secondary schools. Others feel that private schools can have negative effects on the society. Discuss both the view and give your opinion?

It is irrefutable to say that education is extremely important for all people
thesedays
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these days
and everyone
is want
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is wanting
has wanted
wants
best knowledge to attain from schools. While it is thought
by
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of
a group of masses that private schools brings more advantages, other hold opposing
view
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views
and deem that it have some drawbacks for
community
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the community
. I accord that it
have
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has
both positive and negative aspect, which
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss in my
further
paragraphs. There are
some some benefits
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some benefits
of
attaing
disposed to attack
attacking
private education.
First
is teachers are well-educated there and they have the responsibility of every single student regarding
study
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the study
. Apart from
this
pupils can learn best knowledgeable things from
private education Centers
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the private education Centers
, that will make their future secure and choose their Intetsing or suitable professions. In
this
way they would not be suffered in
further
life for finding jobs. Another positive thing is that schools provide best labs of science and
computer including
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computer, including
libraries and buses Itselves. So that learners and parents can remain satisfied or comfortable. More specifically, competition
also
organized there so that students can polish their
quilities
an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone
qualities
quilts
and their confidence
aslo
in addition
also
enhance.
However
,
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,
First
is
poor individuals
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poor, individuals
cannot afford
fees
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the fees
of private schools, because if any parents want to
admission
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admit
in
this
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
,
first
of all they have to huge amount of expense for
this
. So only affluent people can arrange handsome amounts of money for admission. Another
wayout
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way out
is that private schools do some unnecessary activities
from
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for
pupils, in which they need to spend funds, different types of projects given by teachers and some lower age students unable to make these,
then
their parents make them or tuition mentors.
Therefore
. These are the disadvantage of private schools. To recapitulate,
although
private schools have some negative as these are inflected school and give unnecessary work to students in which they have to spend money
,
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,
it
have
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has
some positive
also
in terms of providing
best
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better
infrastructure and pay attention to every pupil. I think these are just
depend
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depending
on
person situation
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the person's situation
person's situation
a person's situation
like they are rich or poor.

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