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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 care is very important and I agree to a large extent that every country should have a free
health
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service
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 system in
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 present day, even if it means the latest medical treatments may not be available because of its unbearable expenses.
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, the availability of basic primary
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 care cannot be underestimated in a gathering or region, it is very important and its inadequacy has led to so many lives lost to sickness like Malaria, fever, typhoid and more. In Nigeria, a large percentage of people suffer and maybe die from lack of basic
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 care
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 system. It is their legitimate right of the government, to make available quality medical treatment to them at no cost,
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, some terminal diseases
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 as cancer, heart attack and others are more vulnerable and require more in-depth attention and aid
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 making it expensive and slightly unbearable.
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, it would be extremely difficult for unemployed and aged people to afford medical treatments in the absence of basic free
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 systems as they do not have any source of income,
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 making them more susceptible to death
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 of the illness.
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 to
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, the government is responsible for the wellness of its citizens and should
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 take necessary action to make available the required
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 system with charging a penny. In conclusion, good
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 is the primary constituent of peoples lives,
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 the government should fund and support good
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service
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 systems with charging its citizens.
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