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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Health
 care is very important and I agree to a large extent that every country should have a free
health
service
 system in
this
 present day, even if it means the latest medical treatments may not be available because of its unbearable expenses.
Firstly
, the availability of basic primary
health
 care cannot be underestimated in a gathering or region, it is very important and its inadequacy has led to so many lives lost to sickness like Malaria, fever, typhoid and more. In Nigeria, a large percentage of people suffer and maybe die from lack of basic
health
 care
service
 system. It is their legitimate right of the government, to make available quality medical treatment to them at no cost,
however
, some terminal diseases
such
 as cancer, heart attack and others are more vulnerable and require more in-depth attention and aid
thus
 making it expensive and slightly unbearable.
Secondly
, it would be extremely difficult for unemployed and aged people to afford medical treatments in the absence of basic free
health
service
 systems as they do not have any source of income,
thus
 making them more susceptible to death
as a result
 of the illness.
In addition
 to
this
, the government is responsible for the wellness of its citizens and should
therefore
 take necessary action to make available the required
service
 system with charging a penny. In conclusion, good
health
 is the primary constituent of peoples lives,
therefore
 the government should fund and support good
health
service
 systems with charging its citizens.
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