Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion.

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TODAY'S INNOVATION IN TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN INCREASING DAY BY DAY. CERATIN FOLKS ARE BECOMING MORE CURIOUS TO BUY THOSE NEW ELECTRONIC DEVICES.

FIRSTLY

THIS

ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW

THIS

HABITS CONSIDERED AS A DETRIMENTAL ACCORDING TO ME AND

SECONDLY

, GIVE A MAJOR REASON OF HAVING AFFECTION TO BUY A LATEST ANY HIGH TECH MACHINE.

LASTLY

, STATE THE OPINION IN THE FAVOR OF USING THE ELECTRONIC APPLIANCE AS PER THE REQUIREMENT. ON THE ONE HAND, FREQUENTLY BUYING NEW GADGET MAY HAVE IMPACT ON MENTAL HEALTH

SUCH

AS ADDITION TO THE DEVICE AND

THIS

MAY LEAD TO AFFECT THEIR EYE SIGHT AND INTTELEGENT,

CONSEQUENTLY

THE DEVICES RELEASE SOME INFRARED RAYS WHICH IS LIFE THRETENING ESPECIALLY FOR THE ADOLESCENCE.

FOR INSTANCE

, THE OXFORAD UNIVERSITY STUDIES IN THE 2019 REPORTED THAT 60% OF THE ADULTS HAVE ADICTION TO THE MOBILE PHONE OR TABLET,

CONSEQUENTLY

THEY DEVELOPED SERIOUS FITNESS ISSUES AT A VERY EARLY AGE.

ON THE OTHER HAND

, BUYING A NEW PHONE AND LEARNING ABOUT IT USEFULL AT SOMEPOINT FOR AN INDIVIDUAL, BECAUSE BY DOING

THIS

HE IS TRYING TO CO-OPERATE WITH THE MODEREN WORLD. AS IT IS NEEDED TO SURVIVE IN THE SOCIETY.

FOR EXAMPLE

, AS PER THE NEW REPORT OF THE INDIA TIME, 70% OF PEOLE USED TO BUY A NEW PHONE TO MAKE THEIR LIFE MORE EFFORLESS AND TO MAINTAIN THE SOCIAL STATUS IN THE SOCIETY. ACCORDING TO MY THOUGHT, I BELIEVE WHEN GADGET IS USED AS PER THE NEDDS, IT DOES NOT AFFECT THE HEALTH AS MUCH AS ADDICTION DOES AND

ALSO

IT IS PRECIOUS TO HAVE THE KNOWLEDGE OF HOW IT WORKS IN

THIS

CONTEMPORARY WORLD. IN CONCLUSION, BUYING A LATEST ELECTRONIC DEVICE IS A BENEFIACIL AT SOME POINT,

HOWEVER

, ONE SHOULD NEVER BEGOTIATE THE CONSEQUENCES BEING HABITUAL TO

THIS

TREND.

AS A RESULT

THIS

MIGHT DECLINED THE DANGEROUS WELLNESS PROBLEM AMONG THE CIVILIAN.

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Lexical resource: 9.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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technology advancements
convenience
efficiency
productivity
status symbol
financial burden
obsession
impulsive
consumerism
sustainability
e-waste
environmentally friendly
second-hand market
repairability
upgradability

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Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue can be solved?

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