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Some people believe that students should choose their university major based on their personal interests, while others think it is better to choose a major that offers better job opportunities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people argue that
students
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 should choose their college majors based on job opportunities rather than personal
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interest
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, others believe it is better for
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 to follow their passions to stay motivated and productive in their future careers. Personally, I strongly believe that
students
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 should study what they are interested in. In
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 essay, I will explain my opinion in more detail. One reason why
students
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 should choose their major based on
interest
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 is that it helps them stay motivated during their studies. University can be challenging, and
students
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 often feel stressed or tired. If they are studying a subject they enjoy, it is easier for them to stay focused and work hard.
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, a student who loves art will likely put more effort into their projects than someone who was forced into studying engineering.
Interest
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 makes a big difference in how
students
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 perform. Another reason is that choosing the wrong major can lead to long-term regret. If
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 pick a field just because it offers more jobs, they might end up in a career they do not enjoy.
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 can affect their happiness and job performance in the future.
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, I once followed my parents’ advice to study teaching because they believed it was a stable and respectful career.
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, I quickly lost
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 and felt unhappy, which made me change my path later.
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 shows that choosing a major without
interest
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 can waste both time and energy. In conclusion, I believe
students
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 should choose their college majors based on their own interests.
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 helps them stay motivated during their studies and avoid regret in the future. Even if the job market changes, passion and dedication can lead to success in any field.

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Task Achievement
Consider elaborating more on the opposing view of choosing majors based on job opportunities with at least one main point and example.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a smoother flow between points in your paragraphs to strengthen the logical progression of ideas.
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Your introduction clearly outlines your opinion and sets up the discussion effectively.
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You provided relevant examples from personal experience, which adds depth and clarity to your arguments.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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