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Some people advocate death penalty for those who commit violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your own opinion.

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It is believed that heinous crimes are best prevented by taking violent steps, and giving capital punishments are
one
 way of doing
this
. There are some benefits and drawbacks of
such
 punishments which we will discuss here. On the
one
 hand, those who support
death
 sentences point to the need for the society to learn from others.
Consequently
, setting examples for other people might prohibit them from committing serious crimes.
For instance
, in countries
such
 as Saudi Arabia, potential offenders involved in killings, sexual or drug abuse are left with the only option of
death
 sentence, which reflects that local authorities have to deal with
such
 issues less often, as people are afraid of committing
such
 crimes. While
in contrast
, if
such
 laws are not being practiced,
then
 there would be much difficult for the law enforcement authorities to capture
such
 criminals.
On the other hand
,
death
 penalties might create a devastating effect among common people.
This
 means that no chances of rehabilitation given to the offenders.
This
 might lead to severe problems, as if
one
 is convicted of
such
 crimes or committed
such
 crime, he/she might proceed
further
 before being captured, because he/she would be aware of the fact that no mercy would be given without any chances of appeals. Countries where
death
 penalty is still practiced, often followed by short trials leading to the
death
 penalty, and
one
 might not be able to defend in
this
 short period.
In addition
 to adults, there is a negative impact on children watching
such
 public executions, and may disturb them mentally in their early developmental age. In conclusion,
although
 the
death
 penalty is being practiced for hundreds of years, it seems that
this
 trend is necessary to protect innocent people from serious offenders because there seem to have no chances of changing their mindset.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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