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The spread of multinational companies and insulting increase of globalization produce positive effects for everyone. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s era, westernization has influenced immensely to the
society bringing
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society, bringing
 improvement in standard of living to the general public.
This
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 essay will discuss how foreign companies and
globalization
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 has turned around the lifestyle of the people and a nation’s economy.
Firstly
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, various multinational companies
has invited
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have invited
 many local employees for the
job
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.
In other words
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, MNC’s boosts
job
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market
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 and provide
opportunity
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opportunities
an opportunity
 for the local people to showcase their talent and skills.
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In
such
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 cities which are suffering
from bad
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from a bad job
job
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market
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 conditions,
globalization
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 has played an important part in providing with various types of
job
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 for their daily earnings.
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, at my city, two decades back there were very few vacancies for
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job but
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job, but
 now it has become easier to shift jobs every now and
then
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.
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, wide spread of international companies has helped in developing the infrastructure of the city.
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, rapid increase of
globalization
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 has played a vital role in improving the economic conditions of a country. Many countries in the south east Asia
has developed
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have developed
 in the recent years because of the establishment of the foreign companies which in turn helped to compete in the global
market
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 with increased GDP factor.
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, Japan has a better and effective labour force which
are
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is
 leaders in
employment
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an employment market
the employment market
market
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 that today they serve to most of the American and European companies. To conclude from the above discussion, multinational companies and
globalization
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has made
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have made
 a rapid improvement to backwards countries and has proven to be
efficient producing
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efficient, producing
 positive effects to an individual as well as a country.

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