In many countries the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those cause?

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rate is increasing drastically in many countries due to several reasons.People can deal those cau
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fferent types of crimes in the different countries.Mainly the important thing is Lack of knowledge and due to financial issues.Due to these two the wrong steps has been taken by
the criminals.
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have been taken
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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