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Many young children have unsupervised access to the Internet and are using the Internet to socialise with others. This has can lead to a number of dangerous situations which can be threatening for childrean. Discuss problems and solution.

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In
this
 concurrent world technology made a remarkable progress in each and every field.
However
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,
 nowadays we can see that many adolescents are
access
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accessing
 an
internet
 in their
parents
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parents'
parent's
 absence and communicate online with each other. In child
age they
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age, they
 do not have a sufficient knowledge
abot
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
internet
.
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.
Hence sometimes
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Hence, sometimes
 they put their self
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 tremendous
hazzard
a source of danger; a possibility of incurring loss or misfortune
hazard
hazards
 by using a wrong way. In
uocoming
of the relatively near future
coming
upcoming
 paragraph
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 shall discuss both causes and perks of
this
 ranging phenomena. To initiate with
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,
 today we can see that many youngsters are using a social media applications
such
 as
facebook
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Facebook
,
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,
instagram
,
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,
 tweeter
etc
 and they make a friendship with unknown person and by the time they share their personal information like family income
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,
 credit card details and more on
therefore
 cyber burglars are settled amount in their account.
Moreover
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,
todlers
a young child
toddlers
 are easily addicted by
game
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the game
 and the game addiction make them to create
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
.
For instance
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,
 recently in china one
children
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child
 was
kill
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killed
 by their friend because of they
make
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have made
 a mistake while they were playing a game. To mitigate
this
 biggest phenomena parents should learn them children to access
internet
 on
right direction
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the right direction
.
Secondly use
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Secondly, use
 those software who
show
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shows
 a
privious
just preceding something else in time or order
previous
 searching history on
internet
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the internet
.
Consequently
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,
 there are many devices launched in market for using only for education
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,
 so buy that type of device for children. To conclude
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,
 in the light of
above discussion
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the above discussion
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,
 it can be inferred that
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,
 it is a
parents
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parent's
 responsibility to direct children for using
a
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an
internet
 on
rolight
all of your experiences that determine how things appear to you
reality
realist
 way.

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