scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is an argument that professionals from science and technology tend to be more admired by citizens than workers from the music industry and
arts
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the arts
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, I completely disagree with
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position due to the following reasons.
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with, the salary gap between these professions is giant, since the most famous artists have millionaire salaries rather than regular payments as the majority of scientists and technology experts, as a consequence, they can afford a luxurious lifestyle that it is impossible for the average citizen.
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, the earning of one Wesley Safadao's concert can pay four hundred monthly salaries of Brazilian's scientists as well as IT professionals.
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, having regular positions
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of being famous lead individuals to pay more taxes, as the art and music industries are free of taxes in many regions thanks to their popularity,
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, science and technology workers regularly have their salaries limited by the government.
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, professionals of the arts are commonly loved by fans and the community, due to the popularity enhanced by their work on the media,
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creating a lovely atmosphere to these individuals.
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, after losing
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an
unborn baby, a well-known singer in Brazil received one million letters of support from the population, which would be unlikely to happen with a regular scientist.
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, famous people generally win many presents from
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entrepreneurs
enterprises
interpreters
as well as common individuals, because of their influence over fans which is rare among regular professions,
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feeling more valuable than others. To conclude, I do believe that the
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societal
value more experts from the arts and music than the ones from different industries. Since not only do they earn higher salaries, but
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also are more popular
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are also more popular
than other professionals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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